Response to rough cut feedback.

After receiving feedback from Dan on our rough cut, he made us understand our footage doesn't really have a purpose and only shows a boy walking without a clear introduction of him. After watching the footage again, I believe Dan has a point so therefore my group and I have decided to add our original idea back to the footage. Our original idea involves the character Marcus's mother shouting at him which causes him to leave the house in anger. Also, a new idea we have thought is a voice over of the character Marcus so it gives the audience an insight of his personality and lifestyle. 

We also received feedback from Daniel (group 34) who mentioned our scenes are too long, I agree with this and suggested we cut of the cigarette scene. I've chosen this particular scene because the cigarette packet isn't really visible and you can't see the interaction between the shopkeeper and Marcus, also the shot was a bit shaky. Daniel also mentioned he didn't understand the relationship between the character Marcus and Elijah - this will be established through the voice over of Marcus. 

Blogging Health Check 3

Grade A = Mark: 17

53 posts at health check 3.  Again, blog is looking great with lots of detail around what you've been doing in class.  I can't find your reflection on the rough cut feedback that you got from Dan - I can see his video giving you the feedback but I need to see a post where you've reflected on this and then acknowledged what you are going to do to make the changes.
Aside from this - it's looking great.  Well done.

Rebecca's Feedback to footage.

Rebecca watched our film and suggested that we move our titles into the wide frame as the credits would not be included on a cinema screen if they were positioned how they were. She also said that we should remove our names off the credits if it appears more than once and make sure we replace them with other names, which we can use from films like Kidulthood. This is to ensure that no names appear more than once as it looks unprofessional.

Also, there was a disagreement regarding the music choice for the title sequence and entire footage. So we decided to let Rebecca know about this, and after listening to both the musics she decided it was fine the way it was. This was because the music for the footage matches the Youth Drama film and suggests something will happen like a crime scene, whereas the title sequence music being played during the footage will not have the same effect. This helped us come to a decision and leave the music how it is.

Response to Rough Cut 2 Feedback

Dan said that our footage is meaningless as it does not make sense and is so long. We decided to follow up an idea that we initially thought of but didn't go along with - We are going to add a voice over of Marcus's mother telling him off so that viewers understand that Marcus left the house because he was annoyed with his mother.

We also want to add a voice narration while Marcus is walking so that the viewers get told a story of what they are watching about, as just watching a boy walking can be very tedious.

A member of our class, Daniel from Group 34 also gave feedback about our film - He too said that our footage drags on and to remove the scene where Marcus buys a cigarette as it is very ambiguous and the viewers can't really tell whats in his hand. He also said that he did not understand what was going on between Marcus and Elijah, therefore we decided to add on a narrative voice to dictate the story.

Self Evaluation

I have contributed mostly to the filming process. We used the estate I live in as our location, which is Kingsmead estate in Hackney, I suggested this location as I know it well, it is very symmetrical and it has very liner mise en scene, so i thought this would be a good shot visually.

I felt like this is a strength in our title sequence as it fit our sub genre (which is youth drama) well as it is a stereotypical east London estate which is mainly populated by youths, and the set alone could create the sense of grimy council estate london.
I also contributed with the casting choice, my uncle is the actor who plays Marcus. I thought he was a good casting choice as he fits the stereotypical assumption of bad youths today.
i think the sound that is playing during the production companies should be played during the narrative instead of the production companies as it reflects the atmosphere of title sequence better than the current one we have playing over the narrative.

Contribution

My contributions to the group were mainly to do with the plan and the design of our final product and recording the beginning of our film. Although Zahed was the person who physically edited the titles and music during the editing lessons, I contributed to it by suggesting ideas and helping with the decisions of its music, fonts, positions and styles to help it adapt to the theme of our youth drama.

Response to Rough Cut feedback

After being given feedback from Dan and a peer from our class (Daniel) on the rough cuts, my response to the feedback would be that I have to shorten some of the footage due to the cap of the footage having to be 2 minutes exactly. Furthermore, I have fixed footage that appeared not to be exactly in-line the way it was suppose to be, as well as the fixing the music after Dan said it was not consecutively put as there were gaps in-between.